Blog 20 - Which Essay to Revise

I will revise Essay 3 - New Memories

My focus is to show how familiar, safe, and connected I felt to lower Manhattan prior to the terrorist attacks of 9/11 and how after the attacks I am still connected only for different reasons and the place is also becoming familiar and safe again.

I will develop the point that prior to 9/11 I was connected to lower Manhattan through my work life and that after 9/11 the connection is with my family.

I will revise by elaborating on my descriptions to let the reader picture and experience what I am showing them. I will add description to let the reader know if the scene is before or after 9/11.